User Submitted Poetry
 Interested in feedback about a piece you've written? 

eMule -> The Poetry Archive -> Forums -> User Submitted Poetry


Goto Thread: PreviousNext
Goto: Forum ListMessage ListNew TopicSearchLog In
Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 26, 2009 06:18PM

Harmonic Resonance

Have you looked
Into the eye of a butterfly?
I have...

He does not weep for his future
Or for his past.

He weeps in disbelief
For what he has become
And cannot stand the beauty
Of the moment.


Re: Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 26, 2009 06:21PM

Another metaphor for the life of the poet, I suppose.


Re: Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: May 27, 2009 12:36AM

Metaphoric? Yes, the butterfly sees what less ephemeral beings might have missed.

Les


Re: Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 27, 2009 01:11AM

Yes, Les. That heightened sense of how short a time we have, each of us.

Thanks for your contribution.

Peter


Re: Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: UPMarty (71.87.67.---)
Date: May 27, 2009 01:35AM

Enjoyed this one much, Peter.

That heightened sense of how short a time we have, each of us.
I second that emotion.

He does not weep for his future
Or for his past.

He weeps in disbelief
For what he has become
And cannot stand the beauty
Of the moment.

You have done so well to capture the bittersweetness or the irony of life (for me anyway) with these lines, Peter. I feel inspired to write something on the subject myself, but am too weary right now. I'm hoping it's still there tomorrow or the next day.

Mary


Re: Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 27, 2009 02:09AM

That is the response I prize to a poem...the urge on the part of someone else to write her poem.

Get some rest, Mary, then tackle it.

amo,

Peter


Re: Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: May 27, 2009 07:05AM

Peter:

Not a single superfluous word; each one complementary to the whole. Your poem is a shining jewel from start to finish. This is why I visit here so often.

Joe

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 05/27/2009 07:06AM by hpesoj.


Re: Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: petersz (69.181.22.---)
Date: May 27, 2009 11:15AM

Thank you, Joseph. That is exactly what I aim for every time and so rarely get in a piece.

amo,

Peter


Re: Harmonic Resonance
Posted by: les712 (68.116.85.---)
Date: October 02, 2011 07:00PM

bump




Sorry, only registered users may post in this forum.
This poetry forum at emule.com powered by Phorum.