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Along the Sea
Posted by: Merc (75.210.189.---)
Date: October 01, 2008 09:36PM

As I wander far
Along the foreign strand
I feel the tug of home
Pulling on my hand,
I feel the loneliness
That I have made for me
When ever I am here
On the edge of the sea.

I thought upon my love
So far from home am I
She waits beside the fire
Reflection in her eye.
She wonders why she did
Fall in love with such as he
Who has the need to leave
And walk along the sea.

The wind, it has a chill
That moves through to the bone
The cold that can not be
Assuaged when all alone
Too far from home and love
More than should ever be
A vagabond I know
Somehow must cross the sea


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.181.---)
Date: October 01, 2008 10:56PM

Wow, I really like this one, Terry!

Marty


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: October 02, 2008 01:18AM

It's good to stretch once in a while, Terry. Nice effort here.


Les


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: October 02, 2008 09:00AM

I feel the loneliness
That I have made for me


Revealing words. Nicely written Terry and enjoyable, even though there are no lariats, branding irons, broncos, or camp fires anywhere to be found.

Joe


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: redmitten (216.187.184.---)
Date: October 02, 2008 11:34AM

there's always a fire in terry's work, and a song running in the background.


merc,

i really like the way you present the tug of home and the yearn to wander. written from the heart, this poem rings true.


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: Merc (70.210.156.---)
Date: October 03, 2008 11:48AM

thanks all,


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: hollygolightly (74.192.243.---)
Date: October 05, 2008 12:28AM

very sad. very nice, too. H.


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: les712 (68.116.85.---)
Date: September 27, 2011 08:46PM

bump


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: petersz (67.174.197.---)
Date: September 28, 2011 03:19PM

like the sentiment...feel the writer is struggling with writing it, thus the awkward phrasing.


Re: Along the Sea
Posted by: les712 (68.116.85.---)
Date: September 28, 2011 04:01PM

Terry, generally stuck to cowboy poetry, which is why I enjoyed this other aspect of his personality.

Les




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