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dinner date
Posted by: twotenranch (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 12:58AM

I was zippin' 'long the hiway,
Hungry from my wits,
So I grabbed up my telephone
An' called the gal named Mitts.
She knowed a real good Mexi joint
An' agreed to meet me there.
We each put away a burrito
(one was big 'nuff to share)

We chatted a bit bout poetry
Bout flyin' an' our jobs.
I was stuffin' in burrito parts
In rather nonediquited gobs.
But she just keept on a smilin'
An' we talked of her son a while,
I ate the tortillias hungrily
An' avoided her knowing smile.

In the parking lot we said "g'by"
An took a second and we hugged
Jumped into our respective cars
An' out of there we bugged.
I hit I ninety headed east
Then twenty five on south.
Pickin' parts of burrito
From the corners of my mouth.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: Angelia Allen (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 01:45AM

Hmmm...The rhymes seemed forced, Ole Chap. Good try though.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: Brucefur (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 03:35AM

Terry,

You keep this up they are going to name you the oficial Emule ambassador or something. yawning smiley)

Brucefur
PS: Got your answer to my query. thank you. Funny those ammendments. Sorta like the small print, eh?


Re: dinner date
Posted by: lanaia74 (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 04:41AM

A job well done!


Re: dinner date
Posted by: twotenranch (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 07:38AM

Actually Bruce, it's the large print. Most people, who know anything about it, know the amendments and very little about the body of the document.

Keep, doesn't matter if it's forced, horrible, whatever, it was not intended to replace the iliad.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 09:31AM

forced? Hell, mine are beaten and tortured into shape ! Ha !


Re: dinner date
Posted by: johnniegirl (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 10:54AM

together, we broke bread
called tortillas
over large hot plates
of burritas
there wasn't the time
to teach me to rhyme
so i have no way
to finish this..

twoten, thanks for dinner! we never got to finish talking about everything. next time....

mitts


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 11:36AM

He bit a burrito she ate a tortilla
He said "hey, how are ya" she said "good to see ya"
The waiter came by with some nice mantequilla
And they buttered each other all up


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 11:44AM

The waiter brought over arroz with (con) pollo
he played with his food like it's some sorta yoyo
she told him she thought his behavior's a no-no
as they feasted themselves on the flan

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 11/02/2006 11:50AM by JohnnySansCulo.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 11:49AM

They left without paying ala Pancho Villa
They never had time for that last quesadilla
The fat lady's singin' her "O solo Mia"
My story is over for now !


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 11:50AM

Ole !


Re: dinner date
Posted by: hrfarris (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 02:01PM

Mi muchacho es loco in la cabeza.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: lg (Moderator)
Date: November 02, 2006 02:11PM

Terry, I liked these lines best:

Hungry from my wits (brain food, no doubt)

In rather nonediquited gobs. (as opposed to educated gobs)

An' out of there we bugged


Glad you two had a rendezvous, or should I say encuentro.


Les

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 11/02/2006 02:17PM by lg.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: twotenranch (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 02:11PM

íSI MUCH LOCO!

ediquited is susposed to be using the root word ediquite if spelled correctly would mean manners. ergo unediquited is totally without manners. Or as a slob if you prefer.

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 11/02/2006 02:14PM by twotenranch.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: lg (Moderator)
Date: November 02, 2006 02:19PM

ediquited is susposed to be using the root word ediquite if spelled correctly would mean manners.

It's ok, Terry, you don't have to acknowledge my comments. Everybody knows I still read your stuff.

Les


Re: dinner date
Posted by: hrfarris (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 02:20PM

ergo.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 02:46PM

I am the sanest man alive


Re: dinner date
Posted by: lg (Moderator)
Date: November 02, 2006 02:50PM

I am the sanest man alive

I want a second opinion.


Les


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 03:11PM

Let me check with my other personalities:


Yep, it's unanimous !


Re: dinner date
Posted by: lg (Moderator)
Date: November 02, 2006 03:51PM

Yep, it's unanimous !

Yeah, but did you ask Sancho Panza?



Les


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 04:07PM

The guy who hung out with the Cisco Kid?


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 04:18PM

I did not know he was created by O Henry

[thenostalgialeague.com]


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JosephT (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 04:24PM

The Cisco Kid
War
- written by War (Howard Scott, B. B. Dickerson, Lonnie Jordan,
Harold Brown, Papa Dee Allen, Charles Miller and Lee Oskar)
- as recorded by War on their 1973 album "The World Is A Ghetto"
- single released March 3, 1973
- entered the Billboard Top 40 the week of March 24, 1973 and
stayed for 12 weeks, peaking at #2 the week of April 28, 1973

The Cisco Kid was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid was a friend of mine
He drink whiskey, Poncho drink the wine
He drink whiskey, Poncho drink the wine

We met down on the fort of Rio Grande
We met down on the fort of Rio Grande
Eat the salted peanuts out of can
Eat the salted peanuts out the can

The outlaws had us pinned down at the fort
The outlaws had us pinned down at the fort
Cisco came in blastin', drinkin' port
Cisco came in blastin', drinkin' port

They rode the sunset, horse was made of steel
They rode the sunset, horse was made of steel
Chased a gringo last night through a field
Chased a gringo last night through a field

The Cisco Kid was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid he was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid was a friend of mine

The Cisco Kid was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid he was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid was a friend of mine

The Cisco Kid he was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid he was a friend of mine
The Cisco Kid he was a friend of mine
{fade}


Re: dinner date
Posted by: lg (Moderator)
Date: November 02, 2006 04:25PM

The guy who hung out with the Cisco Kid?

I think you mean the Crisco Kid, I'm talking about this guy:

[en.wikipedia.org] />

Les


Re: dinner date
Posted by: J.H.SUMMERS (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 06:09PM

I enjoyed the poem, Terry. Made me lonesome for some good cooking, all the Mexican places out this way are way too mild with the chilis and spices.

Johnny,
Flan...good stuff.

John


Re: dinner date
Posted by: BlueForAQuarter (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 06:57PM

Cute poem. The Mexican out here stinks, even the fish tacos.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 07:08PM

Don't you have actual Mexicans, like we do?


Re: dinner date
Posted by: BlueForAQuarter (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 07:13PM

No, but we have lots of Dominicans here...


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 07:27PM

Yep, plenty of Dominicans, Salvadorians, Ricans both Costa and Puerto, Cubans, Mexicans, and Canadian Geese


Re: dinner date
Posted by: hrfarris (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 02, 2006 07:45PM

Fish Tacos?!?!?!


Re: dinner date
Posted by: lg (Moderator)
Date: November 02, 2006 09:00PM

Fish Tacos are a staple in San Diego and other places that serve food from Mexico's Atlantic coast states: [splendidtable.publicradio.org] />
[www.google.com] />

Les

Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 11/02/2006 09:02PM by lg.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: twotenranch (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 03, 2006 10:45PM

Don't the tortillias get wet?


Re: dinner date
Posted by: BlueForAQuarter (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 03, 2006 10:47PM

No, they deliquify it first.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: twotenranch (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 03, 2006 10:54PM

How do you deliquify fish?


Re: dinner date
Posted by: hrfarris (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 03, 2006 10:55PM

There are no fish tacos in Texas. There is also no fried soup.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: BlueForAQuarter (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 03, 2006 10:58PM

By cooking them.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: camus (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 04, 2006 12:48AM

BORAT!


Re: dinner date
Posted by: lg (Moderator)
Date: November 04, 2006 05:15AM

Don't the tortillias get wet?

They precook the fish meat, bake/broil/steam and shred it into chunks like you would chicken for a chicken salad sandwich.


Les


Re: dinner date
Posted by: twotenranch (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 04, 2006 09:45AM

I probably wouldn't for a chicken salad sandwich.

JH comprende mi amigo. I┤ve been to eastern spots that use ketchup for salsa.


talk about "get a rope"!

Holly, you is wrong, there is a fried soup at the Edge of Texas, a fabulous steak house in Newsome. (on the border north of El Paso. Ate there yesterday.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: hrfarris (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 04, 2006 10:00AM

Terry, you're pulling my leg.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: Angelia Allen (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 05, 2006 04:26PM

Well, I bet we have fish tacos and that stuff. Just have to know where to look. (I ain't lookin though...don't sound good.)


Re: dinner date
Posted by: johnniegirl (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 06, 2006 03:21PM

i don't know how to spell it, but i just learned how to make it. cervichi. ground raw fish, soaked in fresh lime juice for a few hours. chopped tomatoes, cilantro, onion added to this freshly ground fish after it has soaked in lime juice. scoop it onto a tostado shell...mmm mmm! the fish actually is cooked by soaking in the lime juice.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JohnnySansCulo (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 06, 2006 04:46PM

Ceviche is the only thing I will eat in a mexican Restaurant


Re: dinner date
Posted by: twotenranch (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 06, 2006 05:49PM

no accounting for taste,,,



nor lack thereof.


Re: dinner date
Posted by: JP (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 08, 2006 12:42AM

Hmm, all this talk about fish makes me hungry for some good old fish and chips.

Liked the pome btw. When ya coming to Rockford?

JP


Re: dinner date
Posted by: twotenranch (192.168.128.---)
Date: November 08, 2006 01:09AM

As soon as I get an excuse. I was in Illinois a couple or three years back. Crossed the state I did, from east of Champaign Urbana to Nauvoo, then up to an antique tractor museum o'er in I-oh-way. We wuzn't much of buddies back then. Unknowed you, I did.

Last time I was in the shadow of the large Ben, I ate a fish and chip or six. Never could get me to stand very close to a kidney pie though. Even if the piss is boiled out of it.

If God had not invented whiskey, we'd'a o'ercome England centuries ago!




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