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Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: joseph r. torelli (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: April 15, 2005 06:14PM

Can you tell me where the flowers are
That glorified our hill;
The purple-tinged wisteria,
The honeyed daffodil?

And where have all the starlings flown,
The grebes, the chickadees,
That raised a psalm to each new morn
With awe-filled symphonies?

I’ve noticed, too, the spruce and fir
That boldly stood their ground
When wind and flood and winter storm
With fury did astound;

Are numbered just a precious few
That have managed to forestall
The woodsman’s axe, the dozer’s blade,
The chain saw and the maul.

The soil that once absorbed the rain
To replenish wells below
Has been stripped away – no deep-set roots
To stem the rapid flow.

The rain now rushes undeterred
Over cragged, barren ground,
And dumps its grimy sediment
Into river, lake, and sound.

Our mountain has been laid to waste
For profits born from greed.
How much more can earth withstand
Before we just concede?


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: lg (---.ca.charter.com)
Date: April 15, 2005 06:31PM

Nicely done, Joseph. We need more people (especially in government) who have a conscience. We're betting our future on the earth's resiliency, without thinking that the world's resources hold a finite supply of needed materials.


Les


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: drpeternsz (---.hsd1.ca.comcast.net)
Date: April 15, 2005 06:37PM

With a human consciousness of what we, our species, does, there is hope that our earth may survive us all and replenish her stores for whatever, whoever, comes along after we are gone. We may not ourselves endure, but creation, it seems may endure.

I liked your poem, JOe, it shows the craftsman like care I have seen in others of your work.

Peter


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: Debutant (---.range81-152.btcentralplus.com)
Date: April 15, 2005 06:41PM

Nice work with an important message.


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: J.H.SUMMERS (---.chartertn.net)
Date: April 15, 2005 07:59PM

JoeT,

Very well done. The form, rhyme and the message all work together in this poem. We were responsible for the destruction...are we responsible enough to fix it? I hope so.

john


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: Keeper of Light (---.gcecisp.com)
Date: April 16, 2005 12:36AM

Beautiful!


"Loving people is like farting in the wind; You don't actually accomplish anything, but you feel better."

~The Great and Powerful Angelia~


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: joseph r. torelli (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: April 16, 2005 08:50AM

Les:

The sad part about this poem is that it describes the very real destruction of the cliffs that frame the western end of our town. They've been totally stripped and sheered away to make room for a 580-unit condominium complex. And this before work has even been completed on an even larger condo complex right in town! The devastation has wreaked havoc on the environment. We had a doe visit our yard this past winter - the first one ever in the 30 years we've owned the house. She had to cross a six-lane highway and travel more than a mile through city streets to get here. She was hit by a truck a couple of days later. Several others have been killed on the highway along with wild turkeys, foxes, and all sorts of creatures you don't usually see in this part of New Jersey. Development here is totally out of hand.

Peter:

Thanks for reading and commenting. Your thoughts are valued and always welcome.

Debutant:

Yes, the message is important, but I'm afraid so few of those in power are actually listening. Thank you.

John:

You've written so many excellent poems about nature. I was hoping you'd see this one and enjoy it. I'm glad you did.

Keeper:

Always glad to hear from you. Thank you for the comment.


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: JP (---.an3.chi30.da.uu.net)
Date: April 17, 2005 12:28AM

A worthwhile read with a message Joe. I enjoyed it immensely. Unfortunately greed will always win out. I hope it isn't too late already.

JP


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: K.Q. (213.186.184.---)
Date: April 17, 2005 02:40PM

The soil that once absorbed the rain
To replenish wells below
Has been stripped away – no deep-set roots
To stem the rapid flow.

I appreciate your empathy with nature and empathise too. This was an enjoyable read!


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: joseph r. torelli (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: April 17, 2005 08:03PM

JP and K.Q.:

Thank you both for reading and commenting. I don't consider myself much of an environmentalist, but this devastation is brutal - a real blight. The cowardly behavior of our elected officials and the "in your face" attitude of the developer set off an inner anger that still surprises me somewhat. It's really the first time anger has ever inspired me to write.

JoeT


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: Gwydion (---.bchsia.telus.net)
Date: April 17, 2005 08:14PM


Joseph, a devastatingly true read...beautifully written for an ugly reality. Gwyd


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: joseph r. torelli (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: April 18, 2005 04:39PM

Gwydion:

I appreciate your comments which I always welcome.

JoeT


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: Gwydion (209.53.139.---)
Date: April 21, 2005 11:53AM



Enough trees are brought down, daily; we don't need this piece of poetry to fall away either. Bump.

Gwyd


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: joseph r. torelli (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: April 21, 2005 09:29PM

Thanks, Gwydion. Your check from the Earth Day Committee is in the mail.

JoeT


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: les712 (68.116.83.---)
Date: April 19, 2008 03:01PM

Dang, Joe, the least you could have done is bumped this one to the top. Good poem, happy earth day.


Les


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: UPMarty (71.86.182.---)
Date: April 19, 2008 10:06PM

Wow. I must have missed this back then. A very well written and enjoyable poem, Joe. It was well worthy of being bumped and timely. Thanks Les.

Marty


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.247.---)
Date: April 22, 2008 11:06AM

Les:

Thanks for the bump.

Marty:

Glad you found it this time. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Joe


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: sl (202.83.53.---)
Date: April 24, 2008 02:16AM

So beautifully written


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.247.---)
Date: April 24, 2008 08:20AM

sl:

Thank you. I appreciate your taking the time to read and to comment.

Joe


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: April 17, 2009 12:55PM

Bump for Earth Day, April 22, 2009.


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: les712 (68.185.64.---)
Date: April 18, 2009 06:21AM

Good one, Joe.

[www.earthday.net] />

Les


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: easyeverett (97.125.154.---)
Date: April 18, 2009 04:20PM

Joe, you transported me back to the masters of
the craft with this call to conscience. An elegant
and true reflection of our neglect of so many things. tom


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: hpesoj (69.116.241.---)
Date: April 18, 2009 04:39PM

Tom:

Your comments are much appreciated.

Joe


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: hpesoj (68.197.144.---)
Date: April 19, 2011 07:50PM

One more time for Earth Day. I'm afraid the world has stopped paying attention to this most important date.


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: petersz (67.174.198.---)
Date: April 20, 2011 03:01PM

yes.


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: les712 (68.116.86.---)
Date: April 22, 2011 03:14PM

Joe, some of us haven't forgotten Earth Day.

Click on the link below the featured video. The videos listed in the right hand column of the following page each explore an Earth Day topic:

[www.youtube.com] />

Les

Edited 3 time(s). Last edit at 04/22/2011 03:21PM by les712.


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: petersz (67.188.236.---)
Date: January 12, 2012 02:21PM

bump


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: hpesoj (68.199.58.---)
Date: January 25, 2012 10:03PM

Thank you, Peter


Re: Elegy For A Mountain
Posted by: petersz (67.188.236.---)
Date: January 26, 2012 12:42AM

Well, some of your poems are very special...this among them.

Peter




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