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Jack’s Café
Posted by: rikki (---.carlnfd1.nsw.optusnet.com.au)
Date: April 10, 2005 09:05PM

This is about one of my favourite places (in blank verse, unrhymed iambic pentameter). When the sun goes down, the poets gather.





Jack’s Café


So, this is where I spend my evenings now;
when darkness draws a curtain on the harsh
and often unforgiving light of day
you’ll find me here, blind-driven by some muse
to smoky rooms where friendly glasses clink,
sweet mellow strings in syncopation call
and tired piano grins its yellow teeth.

Where thin-faced men, intelligent and tense,
aesthetically attired in narrow suits -
their dark eyes soft with poetry and sex -
soliloquize on life and death and love;
where hints of cruelty and tenderness
make lyric verse of loneliness and lust,
and Vettriano figures bare their souls
to sleek-haired barmen polishing the art
of mixing metaphors in cocktail twists.

Here, words alone can dance me through the night,
or even dance me to the end of love;
while amateur philosophers discourse
in rhythm to the tap of shiny shoes
a strange and tender magic weaves a net
of imperfect pasts and fantasies fulfilled;
and all these wordsmiths, billy boys at heart,
adept at finely tuning loss and beauty,
in nightly ritual play the waiting game and
draw me back again, again, to Jack’s Café.


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: Percival (---.rev.o1.com)
Date: April 10, 2005 09:08PM

Bravo.


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: Marty (---.247.72.102.up.mi.chartermi.net)
Date: April 10, 2005 09:47PM

Sounds like an interesting place.

a strange and tender magic weaves a net
of imperfect pasts and fantasies fulfilled;

Like what these lines do to create an inviting atmosphere. I see why you keep going back. Wouldn't mind going to a place like this even just once to see guys.......

mixing metaphors in cocktail twists. (good line)

Makes me wonder what the women do?

Seriously, enjoyed the read. Good job!

Marty


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: lg (---.ca.charter.com)
Date: April 10, 2005 09:54PM

Very good read, Rikki, post more.


Les


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: jkvanburen (---.parkvl01.md.comcast.net)
Date: April 11, 2005 01:22AM

hmm what is the address?


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: Debutant (---.range217-42.btcentralplus.com)
Date: April 11, 2005 08:43AM

Enjoyed it, Thanks

Favourite vivid line :

of mixing metaphors in cocktail twists.



Post Edited (04-11-05 07:45)


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: K.Q. (---.118.31.34.ua.batelco.jo)
Date: April 11, 2005 08:57AM

Can I have the address? Sounds great. I envy you!!


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: joseph r. torelli (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: April 11, 2005 09:15AM

Rikki:

Outstanding, both in construction and use of language. Well-done!

JoeT


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: JP (---.an7.chi30.da.uu.net)
Date: April 11, 2005 11:51AM

Rikki,
I don't comment much anymore, but I couldn't resist this one. It is as Joe said outstanding,... finely crafted, and a worthwhile read. One doesn't even notice the lack of rhyme.
Thankyou for my first pleasure of the morning.

JP


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: Gwydion (209.53.139.---)
Date: April 11, 2005 11:57AM


Hi Rikki, I agree with everybody above, from 'post more', 'bravo' to 'Thank you for my first pleasure of the morning' (amen, JP) and 'the address?’

Quality write and read; fraught with imagery and the atmosphere of the café is intoxicating....love it, thank you. Gwyd


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: camus (---.server.ntli.net)
Date: April 11, 2005 08:14PM

Superb.

I've recently been blending Vettriano images onto various 3d cups and saucers, which is very cafe type culture imagery.

Yeh sounds heavenly.


Doubt everything. Find your own light.


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: northcountrywoman (---.hsd1.or.comcast.net)
Date: April 11, 2005 10:20PM

This is wonderful--exquisite detailing and atmosphere! I'll read it way more than once!

ncw


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: Gwydion (209.53.139.---)
Date: April 12, 2005 11:30AM



Oops, this one fell a little...BUMP!


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: rikki (---.carlnfd1.nsw.optusnet.com.au)
Date: April 12, 2005 07:26PM

Thanks everyone for taking the time to read this and for your encouraging comments!
I enjoyed writing this one because it's about an atmosphere/place i love - an eclectic mixture of poets, writers, musicians. Gwydion, jkvanburen, KQ, it's in inner-city Sydney. And Camus, I really like Vettriano's imagery too - that retro elegance and old fashioned sophistication (and those gorgeous clothes).

thanks to each one of you!
rikki


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: camus (---.server.ntli.net)
Date: April 12, 2005 09:37PM

Forgot to ask was "dance me to the end of love" a reference to Mr Cohen?


Doubt everything. Find your own light.


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: rikki (---.carlnfd1.nsw.optusnet.com.au)
Date: April 13, 2005 01:03AM

Yes, it was intentional - trying to evoke that 'Leonard Cohen' kind of feeling , a kind of gentle melancholy.

r.


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Re: Jack’s Café
Posted by: drpeternsz (---.hsd1.ca.comcast.net)
Date: April 13, 2005 01:36AM

rikki,

Dare I note it sounds more polished than either the Cafe Prague or the Trieste or Tweeties, the cafe and the bar I go to hang every week to hear fine poets,-- where poets still have to contend with mere drunks and Expresso machines that'll curl your toes. I good pome though.

avante,

Peter


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