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My first 5 years
Posted by: camus (---.server.ntli.net)
Date: November 29, 2004 10:49PM

Born then torn, named then sold
A premium bond without a breast.

Hunted down by Nana, looking like
Mouskouri, a horn rimmed reclaimer.

Lives were easier to recoup back then,
less paper work, less blood sodden tape.

Lived idyllically, cheekily fixing lawn
mowers, admiring my grandfather’s

gaunt face, and mutton broth. Breathing
grass and privet hedges, wearing strawberry

china sandals, delicately being loved by old
people, whose distant smell of loss still

lingers, whose cancers battled till the death,
Nana's lung failed, grandfather’s pancreas won

We all lost.



Post Edited (11-29-04 21:54)


Doubt everything. Find your own light.


Re: My first 5 years
Posted by: drpeternsz (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: November 29, 2004 10:54PM

A fine remembrance to carry on with.

Peter


Re: My first 5 years
Posted by: K.Q. (---.hs.14.118.212.in-addr.arpa)
Date: November 30, 2004 09:34AM

Born then torn, named then sold
A premium bond without a breast.

Interesting yet painful!

delicately being loved by old
people, whose distant smell of loss still

lingers, whose cancers battled till the death,
Nana's lung failed, grandfather’s pancreas won

We all lost.

beautiful depiction of memories, and to what conclusion. Loss is just a result, the process being more significant in its impact.


Re: My first 5 years
Posted by: drpeternsz (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: November 30, 2004 09:43AM

Loss is just a result, the process being more significant in its impact.

Khalida, your amazing.


Re: My first 5 years
Posted by: camus (---.server.ntli.net)
Date: November 30, 2004 03:24PM

"Loss is just a result, the process being more significant in its impact."

so very true.


Doubt everything. Find your own light.


Re: My first 5 years
Posted by: lg (---.ca.charter.com)
Date: December 01, 2004 12:12AM

A beautiful remembrance Kris. It's amazing what we recall from our youth. In my mind I can still smell the vanilla in the kitchen from my mom's homemade cookies.


Les



Post Edited (12-01-04 00:47)


Re: My first 5 years
Posted by: les712 (66.189.172.---)
Date: April 14, 2013 11:21PM

bump




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