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Almost Gone
Posted by: frosty (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: October 11, 2004 04:10PM

the memory escaping
the mind cage
just as you fought
to escape
the confines
you imagined,
my love
a strong held
sense
of restlessness
trust
that I understand
the need for
grass blades of summer
between my toes
and the
lick
of autumn wind
across my cheek
remind me
why it has to change
before we are
ready
hold tighter
just this once
before the release
I held my breath
hoping to suspend
the tick
tock
shake me
back
inhale again
before the last
grain of sand falls
and my
hour glass
shapes
no more
and then, farewell

Allow life to treat you well and be determined to make it great.


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: K.Q. (194.165.154.---)
Date: October 11, 2004 04:35PM

frosty, I like the wya this sounds being read out loud. Its lines sound like quick breathing as if in a race with time. Beautiful images here:

my love
a strong held
sense
of restlessness
trust
that I understand
the need for
grass blades of summer
between my toes
and the
lick
of autumn wind
across my cheek


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: frosty (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: October 11, 2004 08:52PM

thanks, KQ.

trust
that I understand
the need for
grass blades of summer
between my toes
and the
lick
of autumn wind
across my cheek
remind me
why it has to change
before we are
ready

is my favorite part.

Allow life to treat you well and be determined to make it great.


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: Keeper of Light (208.14.26.---)
Date: October 11, 2004 10:08PM

My mind automatically went to....frosty the snow man...

oops.......anyway......I like the poem very much. Very expressive! Groovy!


"Loving people is like farting in the wind; You don't actually accomplish anything, but you feel better."

~The Great and Powerful Angelia~


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: peternsz (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: October 12, 2004 02:57PM

the poem
just
turns and turns,
as the feelings
it expresses
twist and turn
through the words,
through the speaker
to the audience
the the poet
herself
in the breath of her
string of images
flickering through the light
she keeps for each of us


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: peternsz (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: October 12, 2004 03:04PM

just this once
before the release

we take a chance,
all we have on our side

against the breaking glass
the ache off our ribs

the trivial curse
in the spider web

the Sanskrit prophesy:
This Too Shall Pass

we don't need so much
to hold on and hold up
just push through

the moment
will take care of itself

the breathe between
the lines

let a little light through
anyway



********************************************
Angie, I just felt like writing a little poem for you, Peter.

happenstance is all we have on our side


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: peternsz (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: October 12, 2004 03:09PM

Excuse me frosty, I had a mental eclipse and said angie in my last two note, merging two "strangers" I whose voices I like a loct, yours and Keepers. I hope you two sill "just let it pass by" as Leonard Chen sayd in "Bird on a Wire"

shalom,

Peter

****************************************************
happenstance is all we have on our side


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: frosty (---.regus.com)
Date: October 12, 2004 03:17PM

no worries, peternsz. let it flow...

Allow life to treat you well and be determined to make it great.


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: lg (---.ca.charter.com)
Date: October 13, 2004 01:31AM

Good job Frosty, I enjoyed the reflection and realization of time passing.

Les


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: peternsz (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: October 13, 2004 01:36AM

the tick
tock
shake me
back

sounds soo good, breaks the rhythmical smoothness with fun


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: frosty (---.regus.com)
Date: October 13, 2004 09:53AM

les, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Allow life to treat you well and be determined to make it great.


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: frosty (---.regus.com)
Date: October 13, 2004 09:53AM

Peter, I often like to throw in something like that to shake things up a bit.

Allow life to treat you well and be determined to make it great.


Re: Almost Gone
Posted by: frost42_24 (67.160.36.---)
Date: August 24, 2011 12:07AM

bump...just felt like reliving/posting this one again.




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