his bottle cap twists off and on
without use of metal devices
and I wish you were that easy
but you'd don't progress with time
you are comfortable there
in your 16oz. glass bottled world
expecting; inviting everyone
to pry you open if they dare
I am feeling brazen
accepting your challenge
I bring your neck to my lips
and lick the condensation-
product of your frozen interior
but hesitate to drink of you
my hands grow cold and you slip
your exterior exploding
as you hit the concrete floor
and lay fragmented and defeated
going flatter day by day
as you watch me twist the cap off
and see my lips caress the rim
of your successor

Allow life to treat you well and be determined to make it great.

sorry for the double post, people. is there a way to delete it? If not, let's comment if possible, on this thread?

Allow life to treat you well and be determined to make it great.

A very contemporary metaphor, it is refreshing!


Les

Interesting ! I like the metaphor too!

thanks. I'm pretty fond of it myself.

Allow life to treat you well and be determined to make it great.

Echoing the above...metaphor rocks!

It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)

worth another taste,

Peter

thanks, Peter. Chug it!

bump...just came across this one again and it made me laugh.

every four years, huh? the vintage stuff.

I sometimes go back and re-read stuff I've written and I'm surprised by the motivation I must have felt at the time I wrote it. The metaphors change over time, don't they.

Les

haha. yes. I remember exactly what triggered this one. I giggled when I read it again, just thinking of the inspiration.

life's quite the ride.

Life's quite the ride, indeed. Enjoyed the "freshness" of this.

life's quite the ride

Amen to that.


Les

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fantastic

Thanks,holly