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Little Contest
Posted by: Emer (---.as1.cld.dublin.eircom.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 02:16PM

O.K. MarianNYC, here it is. Whoever comes up with the best title will have this poem, freshly written and all, named after them/with their title. (re necessary?)

The first time it happened, I was amazed.
I couldn't believe it was possible, and I was right.
It was just a game.
Always just a game.
And now I can't get you out of my mind.
You're everything I see,
Everything I do,
All that I want.
Come back?

Regards


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Hugh Clary (---.denver-03rh15rt.co.dial-access.att.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 02:54PM

Boomerang Baby?


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: lg (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: June 24, 2004 03:31PM

Just a game

Les



Post Edited (06-24-04 14:32)


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 03:31PM

"Someone gave Corn to the Dog"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 03:33PM

Just kidding !

Here's my real one:

Ubiquitous


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Talia (---.dialsprint.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 03:37PM

I like "Someone Gave Corn to the Dog"

How about, "Come Back"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 03:55PM

Corn to the Dog is so wildly inappropriate that it matches EVERYTHING
The effect is one of incongruity.


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 03:59PM

"Delay of Game"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Just Jack (---.southg01.mi.comcast.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 05:32PM

Emer-

This IS a challenge.


This piece can be broken into four distinct segments.
L1 & L2 are about revelation.
L3 & L4 are pondering the revelation, with a dose of denial.
L5, L6, L7, L8 all about obsession.
L9 takes a sharp turn into neediness.


It flows well enough from thought to thought, but a title that suits the first set of lines has nothing to do with the others. If it is appropriate for the ending it has little in common with the middle.


My half-baked suggestion would be 'Beguiled'.



Jack


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Marian-NYC (---.nyc1.dsl.speakeasy.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 07:36PM

My suggestion is: "You"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: glenda (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: June 24, 2004 07:58PM

Unexpected


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: IanB (---.tnt11.mel1.da.uu.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 08:07AM

'Surely I deserve a rematch?'

though this might go better as an added last line, or as a replacement for the present last line ('Come back?'), with the title (in either case) being 'Double or Quits'

If this wins, my intention is to donate the prize to charity.



Post Edited (06-25-04 19:21)


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: joseph r. torelli (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 08:45AM

"Erection"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Desi (---.grecian.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 08:55AM

Appeal to ball accidentily thrown over gate while playing tennis


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: IanB (---.tnt11.mel1.da.uu.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 09:12AM

I like that, Desi! Though 'hit over high fence' might be better than 'thrown over gate'


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Desi (---.grecian.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 09:44AM

You're right:

so appeal to ball accidentily hit over high fence while playing tennis

(I'm still not a native speaker, and couldn't remember what you did with a tennis ball ;-)


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 10:11AM

I liked the deliberate release of frustration by "thrown over gate"
with the subsequent regret of the action.

Accidents just happen.


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Desi (---.grecian.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 10:16AM

You have a point. So I choose to put in two entries. Is that allowed?


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Emer (---.as1.cld.dublin.eircom.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 10:37AM

You can put in as many entries as you like!


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 10:58AM

The more I look at the title of this thread, the more I like it as the title of the poem:

"Little Contest"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Marian-NYC (---.nyc1.dsl.speakeasy.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 12:14PM


Emer says it's okay to put in more than one entry, so I have two:

"You"


"Me"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Pam Adams (---.bus.csupomona.edu)
Date: June 25, 2004 12:31PM

Desi wrote:

(I'm still not a native speaker, and couldn't remember what you
did with a tennis ball ;-)

Usually, I miss!

pam


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 12:34PM

I give them to the dogs


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Just Jack (---.southg01.mi.comcast.net)
Date: June 25, 2004 06:59PM

I thought that was corn?


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: June 28, 2004 09:42AM

JustJack, "someone", not I, gave corn to them !

Actually, Lacrosse balls are better for them, they destroy tennis balls


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Emer (---.as1.cld.dublin.eircom.net)
Date: July 07, 2004 07:58AM

Anyone who wishes to enter this contest may do so until friday. Winner to be announced on saturday. Not too impressed thus far.
Regards


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Hugh Clary (---.denver-04rh16rt.co.dial-access.att.net)
Date: July 07, 2004 10:34AM

Not too impressed thus far.

Tempting, tempting.


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: northcountrywoman (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: July 07, 2004 02:25PM

What people seem to have missed about this poem is that the narrator is a gay trucker who has just blasted past a handsome cop at a speed trap. See? It's simply a matter of careful reading--truckers always say 'come back' on their CB radios.

My entry: Trucker's Lament

All proceeds from my winnings will be donated to charity. Well, after expenses, of course.


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: July 07, 2004 03:55PM

"Hackney, Believe One Iota"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Jean-Paul (---.nt.net)
Date: July 08, 2004 01:26AM

"Obsessed"?

"I "Love Summer more than I hate Winter"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: joseph r. torelli (---.dyn.optonline.net)
Date: July 08, 2004 09:49AM

Perhaps my first submission was a bit "saucy," as one of my British friends is fond of saying. Consequently, I am re-submitting it as:

"On Grandfather's First Experience With Viagra"

joet


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Gwydion (---.bchsia.telus.net)
Date: July 08, 2004 11:03PM



Hmmmm, I would like to put fourth "Mind Game"

or perhaps it's "Mind-less Game"


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: ns (202.88.172.---)
Date: July 09, 2004 03:26AM

"Lies"


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Gwydion (209.53.139.---)
Date: July 09, 2004 11:34AM



"Get out of my Mind, Man"


It is the mark of an educated mind to be able to entertain a thought without accepting it. (Aristotle)


Re: Little Contest
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: July 09, 2004 12:26PM

"DAMN!! This is some Good-ass Cheese !"




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