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can i ask a ?
Posted by: cncnorman (---.169.141.83.ts46v-08.otnc2.ftwrth.tx.charter.com)
Date: May 05, 2004 01:40PM

I am trying to write a poem which expresses my feeling about people taking their shoes off when they come into my house. Does anyone know where I can go to get help with this?

So far I have come up with:
Come inside
Have a seat
Take the shoes
From your feet

and that is it. I have a bench for peope sit down on and a shoe rack beside it for them to place their shoes. Can anyone point me in the right direction?

Many thanks
Nina


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Talia (---.dialsprint.net)
Date: May 05, 2004 01:51PM

Maybe you should ask Dear Prudence or Miss Manners about this one. Personally, I like to keep my shoes on when I go other people's houses, but that's just me.


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: May 05, 2004 01:58PM

I'm not sure if i understand what type of help you need?

Do you wish to continue with the poem you've started?

Is this going to be a sign that you put up in your home?

Would you like me to write some lines, like

"please have a seat and sit on the bench
take off your shoes, think not of the stench"
or
"use the rack
you'll get them back"

If your feet smell and your nose runs, you're built upside down !


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: May 05, 2004 02:00PM

see, Talia, you took this question in a totally different way than I did...I'm baffled as to the nature of the "help" needed !

You and I won't be going to Nina's house anytime soon !


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Pam Adams (---.bus.csupomona.edu)
Date: May 05, 2004 02:09PM

I'd throw a 'please' or two in there if I were writing it. Other than that, it looks okay.

Also, I wouldn't depend on people reading the sign- I'd just ask them to please remove their shoes.

pam


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: May 05, 2004 02:10PM

Politeness is the glue that holds society together !


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Hugh Clary (---.denver-01rh15-16rt.co.dial-access.att.net)
Date: May 05, 2004 02:33PM

Take the shoes
From your feet

Quite right. And if any are on your knees, leave them, please.


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: May 05, 2004 03:02PM

You're the bee's knees !


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: marian2 (---.range81-152.btcentralplus.com)
Date: May 06, 2004 03:26AM

'and help to keep
my carpets neat/sweet'


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Johnny SansCulo (---.nycmny83.covad.net)
Date: May 06, 2004 09:55AM

Come and be
barefoot among us
with athlete's foot
and toenail fungus


Re: can i ask a ?
Posted by: Marian-NYC (---.nyc1.dsl.speakeasy.net)
Date: May 06, 2004 11:26AM

ANOTHER WAY TO GO:

Find ANY poem about feet and/or shoes, and underneath that just write: "Please take off your shoes before entering." Next to a selection of socks and slippers, if you want to be the Host(ess) with the Most(ess).

This one comes to mind:

    [But] four young oysters hurried up,
    All eager for the treat:
    Their coats were brushed, their faces washed,
    Their shoes were clean and neat --
    And this was odd, because, you know,
    They hadn't any feet.

(from "The Walrus and the Carpenter")




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