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To Say Farewell
Posted by: Keeper of Light (---.texoma.net)
Date: July 02, 2003 03:51PM

My heart has rooms that sigh with dust
And ashes in the hearth.
They must be cleaned and blown away
By daylight's breath.
But I cannot essay the task,
For even dust to me is dear;
For dust and ashes still recall,
My love was here.

I know not how to say farewell,
When farewell is the word
That stays alone for me to say
Or will be heard.
But I cannot speak out that word
Or ever let my loved one go:
How can I bear it that these rooms
Are empty so?

I sit among the dust and hope
That dust will cover me.
I stir the ashes in the hearth
Though cold they be.
I cannot bear to close the door,
To seal my loneliness away
While dust and ashes yet remain
Of my love's day.

-Stephen R. Donaldson

*I absolutely love this poem. Every time I read it I cry. It is so sad. Actually I don't know if Stephen Donaldson wrote this. It was in a book that he wrote. I assume that he wrote it, because the book did not state wheter someone else did. Anyway, what do you think?



Post Edited (07-08-03 14:16)


"Loving people is like farting in the wind; You don't actually accomplish anything, but you feel better."

~The Great and Powerful Angelia~


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Colin (---.nas3.sioux-city1.ia.us.da.qwest.net)
Date: July 04, 2003 01:11PM

I don't like it. The language is stilted, the rhymes are forced (heart and breath don't rhyme), and the sentiment is lugubrious.

I cry when I cut an onion.


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: July 04, 2003 01:28PM

I think it kind of interesting that he used "breath" to end that line when he could have used "start".

Les


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: glenda (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: July 04, 2003 02:14PM

Maybe it's a typo and should read "hearth".



Post Edited (07-04-03 13:15)


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: JP (---.tnt1.rochelle.il.da.uu.net)
Date: July 04, 2003 03:25PM

It is a typo as Glenda suggested.


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Colin (---.nas3.sioux-city1.ia.us.da.qwest.net)
Date: July 04, 2003 09:59PM

I guess it could be a typo. Hearth would make a partial rhyme with breath. But what about these lines?

"I stir the ashes in the heart
Though cold they be."

Another typo?


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: glenda (---.client.comcast.net)
Date: July 04, 2003 10:22PM

I can't defend it. The meter aggravates me.


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Zoe (---.in-addr.btopenworld.com)
Date: July 05, 2003 08:07AM

Stephen Donaldson...he's a science fiction writer isn't he?

Zoe


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: -Les- (---.trlck.ca.charter.com)
Date: July 05, 2003 09:09AM

There is something of a biography here:

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Les


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Pam Adams (---.bus.csupomona.edu)
Date: July 07, 2003 04:54PM

I don't like it- but then I don't like Donaldson's prose writing either, so......

pam


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Keeper of Light (---.texoma.net)
Date: July 08, 2003 03:14PM

Okay, sir Colin. I mispelled hearth. It was not intended to be heart. Sorry. Oh, and by the way; I don't like onions.


"Loving people is like farting in the wind; You don't actually accomplish anything, but you feel better."

~The Great and Powerful Angelia~


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Keeper of Light (---.texoma.net)
Date: July 08, 2003 03:18PM

Okay. I obviously cannot spell the word 'hearth.' Yes, both hearts were meant to be hearth. I changed it.

Stephen Donaldson is a splendid writer. He wrote the Thomas Covenant the Unbeliever series. Maybe they are a bit disturbing, but I find that is what I enjoy.

This may have turned out better if I spelled hearth right. Now that I partially explained myself, does anyone have anything else to say?


"Loving people is like farting in the wind; You don't actually accomplish anything, but you feel better."

~The Great and Powerful Angelia~


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Sir Colin (---.nas3.sioux-city1.ia.us.da.qwest.net)
Date: July 08, 2003 06:11PM

The poem is still bad.

By the way, you misspelled misspelled.


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: marian2 (---.in-addr.btopenworld.com)
Date: July 08, 2003 06:14PM

I rather like it, especially the first and last verses. It goes off a bit in the middle, the first four lines of the second verse don't fit as well. But on the whole, I think he had an interesting idea and brought it off fairly well.


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Keeper of Light (---.texoma.net)
Date: July 09, 2003 03:19PM

I am so sorry Sir Colin. As you can see spelling is not one of my strong points. Thank you for your comment!


"Loving people is like farting in the wind; You don't actually accomplish anything, but you feel better."

~The Great and Powerful Angelia~


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Keeper of Light (---.texoma.net)
Date: July 09, 2003 03:21PM

As I mentioned before he wrote this in a book. It was supposed to be a song. I'm sure if you read the book it would make a lot more sense. Someone important had just died, so it was very fitting. Maybe that's why I cried, simply because someone died. Interesting. You people always make me think! Thanks!


"Loving people is like farting in the wind; You don't actually accomplish anything, but you feel better."

~The Great and Powerful Angelia~


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Pam Adams (---.bus.csupomona.edu)
Date: July 09, 2003 09:27PM

I think it's one of those rules like Murphy's Law- 'Any correction of grammar or spelling will contain at least one mistake.'

pam


Re: To Say Farewell
Posted by: Pam Adams (---.bus.csupomona.edu)
Date: July 09, 2003 09:29PM

And it might work better as a song, with music behind it. Lyrics are not necessarily good poems.

pam




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